Monday, January 25, 2010

an abstract phase called life



[picture courtesy : Felilly [Devianart]

I stand facing the holy gate today
A bridge separating me from my haven
On the other end
I see the holy men set to choose my destiny!
Destiny - the word has always scared me.

the world I lived was so complicated
I muddled through, not knowing where my steps took me.

you said I never did it right.
you said I was still a kid and need to be guided
you never had faith in my decisions
you never allowed me to dream
you never had answers to my questions
Questions which meant life to me

I had you with me all my life
when I had to buy those color pencils
when I looked at that pretty frock with desire,
when I smiled shy to that cute boy in class,
in my teens, when privacy was denied to me
when I had to choose on my career, my life,
you were there observing, instructing, commanding
telling me how wrong I was every time
and how blessed I am to have you to guide.

you lived my life when I had one
and now, when I stand here, lifeless
I am alone, no one to instruct, to guide!
they called me stupid, insane
for I cut my vein, lay indifferent.
they say I ended my life for nothing
when did I have a life of my own?

I stand facing the holy gate today
a bridge separating me and my destiny
on the other end
I see the holy men set to choose my destiny!
yet again, some one else decides for me.

parents, you lived your life all way through. you’ve seen the good and bad of decisions taken. its human to have the urge to go back and correct the steps taken. please never let that urge kill your child's happiness. do not live their life. every moment you take from them, you are living your second life and they are loosing their first.
children, every moment of survival is tough. you could choose to fight and write your own destiny or to obey the rules of nature. today might gift you tears, tomorrow there is hope. dont let your tears stifle your future.

60 comments:

Pooja said...

nicely written!

I agree children should b allowed 2 mould their life there way,but parents should always b present 2 guide n encourage them.. :)

Pooja said...

**their

Anwesa said...

A touching verse it is !

Apart from the message of the poem, I really liked the expressions you used.

PS the Pratsie said...

Reading youa fter such a oooong time .. but i still m so much touched with your wrds and style .. niiice post :)

Lena said...

One of your best poems, Anil. Indeed very thoughtful and beautiful :)

Preeti said...

loved the message in the poem.. well written..

Unknown said...

Glad I landed here...
I was just thinking of writing on similar lines...
very nicely portrayed... And so true in most of the cases... When most of our decisions are taken by someone else, we lose out on our life...
The 'right' amount of parental guidance is at times missing...

Deepa Gopal said...

Really well written one...liked the fleeting images...fab!!!

Thnks a lot Sawan for voting for L'tl A!!!

Rià said...

very well written!!i wonder how some ppl write so nice poems.

Anil Sawan said...

Meera, thnx & you are always welcome dear :)

Anil Sawan said...

Pooja, yes, parents should always be present to guide, to advice - only if they would acknowledge the goodness in their child. if that doesnt happens, I guess the parent doesnt have any right in the child.

Anil Sawan said...

Anwesa, thnk u dearie :)

Anil Sawan said...

Pratzie, yeah, look who is here :) howz u? thnx dear :)

Anil Sawan said...

Lena, thnk u dear :)

Anil Sawan said...

Preeti, thnx swts :)

Anil Sawan said...

Issam, Welcome here bro :) you said it! The 'right' amount of parental guidance is at times missing. cheers!!

Anil Sawan said...

Deepa, thnk u ma'am :) and dnt even mention the thnx, ur daughter is an artist!! :)

Anil Sawan said...

Ria, lol, i am flying now :) thnk u dear :)

Americanising Desi said...

a prized touching piece

Escapist said...

Yes children should give a moment to phase there life the way they want.no doubt there are not as experienced as their parents,but there eyes even cant lie.


jolliieesss:)

Ashwathy said...

beautifully written :-)
i really have nothing much to add to this actually. u've said it all....

touched a chord...

Anonymous said...

Totally loved this... Seriously... Agree with it a 100%

Sh@s said...

Very well-written with a strong message.
Parents should stop imposing their own dreams on their children and let their children live their own dream.

Keep it up!!

Scattered Thoughts... said...

and what was the inspiration behind ?

Anonymous said...

I needed this!!!!

PhilO♥ said...

Amazing one !!!!!
♥♥
Are you going to publish a book??? :)
Check out my new post!

Luscious Sealed Lips said...

Hugs. Loved this like crazy.

Kisses.

Anil Sawan said...

Seher, ur words bring honor to me :)

Anil Sawan said...

Nazia, true:)

Anil Sawan said...

Ashwathy, awe, thnx swthrt :)

Anil Sawan said...

Psychedchick, thnx grl :)

Anil Sawan said...

Shas, thnx swts :)

Anil Sawan said...

Maheep, the foto, it some how made me stare at it for long and this is what it made me write :) all thnx to who ever designed the pic :)

Anil Sawan said...

Princess, awee, cheer up swts, remeber these when u have kids :P

Anil Sawan said...

Juhi, hehe lol, i wish i was that wise :D thnx swty. i read urs :)

Anil Sawan said...

LSL, thnx dear :)

Prats said...

hey... m good... know been out of touch with you fr long... but not from ur blog :P hope to see u on my blog soon :)

Tweety said...

wow amazing...as a parent one muct realise dat u can just give ur child d support and guidance...but let the child decide for himself...aftr all its our lives...though they have our best interests at heart...

Pavitra said...

Lovely post....Very thoughtful..
Parents should really stop forcing their children... :)

Zabi said...

"I see the holy men set to choose my destiny!
yet again, some one else decides for me."

Amazed by your poem. especially the line above..

Anil Sawan said...

Meera, checked. naice :)

Anil Sawan said...

Pratzie,m going right there :D

Anil Sawan said...

Pratzie it gave me this eror "Profile Not Available" :(

Anil Sawan said...

Tweety, thnx dear :) have a wonderful time ahead!!

Anil Sawan said...

Pavitra, thnx dear :)

Anil Sawan said...

Zabi, thnx bro :) gettng married huh?? all the very best :)

Vibhuti Bhandarkar said...

Wow..such mind-altering and profound thoughts. Especially the message at the foot to parents has clicked with me..Im a new mum and thanks to your post Ive got more clues to a parent's 'Dos and Donts' ..
cheers..:)

PhilO♥ said...

Hey.
I'm back. my exams were going on :)
See my post. Hope you're fine!!

Netika Lumb said...

I must say, very sensible one there!! Really loved it!

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

Kudos to you dear Anil.

Chandrika Shubham said...

Beautiful words woven beautifully. :)
Happy blogging! :)

Anil Sawan said...

Vibhuti, thnx ma'am :) m sure ur child wud grow up with a smile :)

Anil Sawan said...

Juhi, i saw i saw.. exams are going on?? hw was it?? i am wonderful, thnx :)

Anil Sawan said...

Netika, thnx dear :)

Anil Sawan said...

Pretzie, thnx swthrt :)

Anil Sawan said...

Chandrika, thnx dear :)

Scattered Thoughts... said...

still alive?

Anil Sawan said...

yes yes very much :) studies + job + sleep takes away time :D

Firebolt said...

Beautiful.. really touching =]

Anil Sawan said...

firebolt, thnx :) unique name, i shud say!