Monday, January 5, 2009

whispers of love



if only i could see the pain in your eyes
if only i could hear the fear in your breathe
the shadows of unseen blinds me through
the cry of the unknown deafens my soul!

if only i could feel your varied heartbeats
if only i could listen to those hushed whispers
how i wish to hear those whispers, to feel your breathe
to hold you close and feel your heartbeats in mine!

if only i could wipe those tears from your cheeks
if only i could bring back the smile on your lips
my eyes are wet, but ill not cry today
you are my strength and ill not loose hope!

if only i could kiss away your pain
it hurts to see my princess weep
the tears wither my skin,
as i lie here, cold and dead!


disclaimer: its just random thoughts put on paper. got nothing to do with my presence. i am very much alive :P

54 comments:

Lena said...

disclaimer was indeed needed... :P

well... i would say it is a POEM :P
and a very interesting perspective here.. sad.. but i liked it.

sawan said...

"well... i would say it is a POEM :P" - thnx for the assurance.. i needed tht :P
happy tht u like it :)

Preetilata【ツ】 said...

what is it not a poem anil??.. but for me it very much is a poem and that too a beautiful one. sad it is but absolutely beautiful too.

i never knew u r a poet also :p

well i hv conveyed ur msg to divs. and i would try to come to hydrbd along with lena. yes blog union is a great idea.but delhi would be the best venue for it. :)

karmanna said...

beautiful :)

Scrawler said...

Hero...Wow!! 'Who' is the inspiration behind this 'poem'?hope u might have heard the song from the movie Bobby?
Mai.N Shaayar To Nahii.N
Magar Ai Ha.Nsii.N
Jabase Dekhaa, Mai.Nne Tujhako, Mujhako
Shaayarii, Aa Gai..

aisa koi baath hein kya?

Freya said...

i like sad and haunting poems. it helps me get serious :P

this isnt a haunting poem, obviously, but it's nice, as Scrawler asks, who's the inspiration?

Vinnie said...

oye sweetu, kya baath hain?? hope things r ok at ur end...break-ups happen - later we miss them - wish things didnt turn out that way- all part of life :)
come out of it, asap!!
i just hope this is a translation of ur arlier malalayalam poems...plsss tell me it is..it is..it is..

swati said...

watever it is i wish u come out of it soon..those were sme beautiful lines sawan..n i cud relate to it..
those "coulds" said it all..
cheer up!

Scattered Thoughts... said...

oye kya ho gaya bhai.. you said that you are alive but seems so are the haunting memories of breakup.. :(

CяystąL said...

I like the last paragraph..reminded me of the song Comfortably Numb by Pink Floyd.."I can heal the pain..get you on your feet again"..
A good attempt!


(The disclaimer was needed. Or I'd very well assume tht I was reading the works of a Zombie! :D)

sawan said...

preetzi, i was never sure i could write a poem, so i told Lena tht i am gona write something and it is supposed to be a poem and better treat it like one :P

thnx for the msg to divz... and preetzi, i dont mind to see anotr city as long as Lena is bringing me truck load of chocolates :P and then maybe you could join us to the trip to hyd. its a good place to visit :P

sawan said...

Karmanna, thnx a lot :)

sawan said...

Scrawler, lol, aise koi baat nahi :) no inspiration as such.. but maybe the memories are playing its trick :P

sawan said...

Freya, happy u liked it :) sometimes unintentionally our memories take over. something like that :)

sawan said...

vinnie darlin, not a translation this time :) but no worries, i am perfectly alright :) no more break ups, i am single for the past one year :P i am already out of it :) thanx swthrt for the concern. luv u loadz!

sawan said...

swati, yeah, kinda liked that pic myself :) it was just momentary burst of emotions. i am perfectly out of it :)thnx for your words :)

sawan said...

ST, lol, break ups are never easy :) but i am over it :) the memories just came back all of a sudden :) being single has its own disadvantages :P

sawan said...

Crystal, welcome here :) you like Pink Floyd? so do i :) yeah zombie right :) you take care dear!

Harshita said...

I loved the post a lot...

God knws why... but love is in the air everywhere :)

Ria said...

beautifully written....love has pain too!

Nidhi said...

damn nice poem. :Claps.. sorry for the facebook thing. well i cant easily let ppl come in my boundaries. pls dont mind...

yamini meduri said...

how i wish to have some one so dear
the pain of my heart, he can hear
he, who can hold me so near
that never in my life i can fear

how i wish to have someone so caring
the every feeling, for only sharing
the cutest smile is wat he is wearing
the pictures of sorrow he is tearing

how i wish to be a dear one
to the best, to that some one
who can see the world in one
its me, only one to very some

how are these lines??? felt these lines after reading your work...!!

nice piece of work Sawan....and dear, disclaimer was not needed..!!

Mithe said...

Beautiful...why didnt I come here sooner? You are blogrolled:)

CrazyHeart said...

that was wonderful lines..:)

i just loved it..:)

SMRITI said...

Love and Loss in Love seem to be the flavor lately...first vinay, now u...gosh...such beautiful lines...where do u guys get ur inspiration from??

Beautiful Indeed.

sawan said...

harshita, yeah kind of.. but i saw pain more than happiness around :( hope this season would pass soon! u take care girlie

sawan said...

Ria, yeah and its how we face this pain that decides the fate of out love! take care girlie.

sawan said...

nidzi, oo, thnx *bows* :) np for the face book thingie.. m sorry i tried to intrude :( u take care..

sawan said...

yamini, wow, those are very beautiful words.. thnx so much for those lines! :) take care of ur self and smile.

sawan said...

Mithe, m honored :) take care.

sawan said...

Crazy heart, happy tht u luvd it :P have fun :)

sawan said...

smriti, we get inspiration from beautiful grls like u :P yeah seems like love is in air.. but lot of pain floatin around :( jus wish everything comes to normal soon! take care dear.

Vigneshwar said...

nice poem loved it

ki said...

I loved this.
Is it fiction? Or does it stem from your own past?

sawan said...

Vigneshwar, thnx buddy.. welcome here..

sawan said...

keerthi, nothin is fiction. the works we call fiction - aren't they influenced by our life, eitr directly or indirectly? it did stem out from my own past, the past which i have forgotten lately :P

Senorita said...

@ Sawan...it is sad..but liked it...

Swayam said...

beautiful...:)

Pri said...

charming poetry there :)

keep writing

sawan said...

Seno, happy tht u liked it! yeah sadness has its own beauty :P

sawan said...

Swayam, thnx :P

sawan said...

priyanka, thnx for your kind words :)

Veni said...
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Veni said...

Hi Sawan,

Nice poem. Made me to think of the poor civilians in Palestine. Hope their misery end soon.

peter said...

i seee :-?
gud one

WarmSunshine said...

beautifully put Anil :)

Glaaaddddd ur "very-much-alive"... or else i wud've missed out on a veryyy sweet frnd :)


*sholly* for being soooo late in visiting....

*smiles*

sawan said...

Hey Veni, a new perspective huh?? beautiful!! :) have a grt day.

sawan said...

Peter, thnx for your words :P

sawan said...

Meher, ths so sweet of you :P

its better now than never :P

and somebody vanished while talkin, guess its a power failure :P

sawan said...

@aquagrl & tushar thnx for finding my blog worth following :P

Geraldine said...

Wow, powerfully and beautifully written. I am so glad I stopped in.

www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com

sawan said...

Geraldine, your words bring honor to me. Thnx for your kind words.

*~*{Sameera}*~* said...

So beautiful and touching!Hope the princess smiled after reading this :)

sawan said...

thnx sami. i wish she did :P