if only i could see the pain in your eyes
if only i could hear the fear in your breathe
the shadows of unseen blinds me through
the cry of the unknown deafens my soul!
if only i could feel your varied heartbeats
if only i could listen to those hushed whispers
how i wish to hear those whispers, to feel your breathe
to hold you close and feel your heartbeats in mine!
if only i could wipe those tears from your cheeks
if only i could bring back the smile on your lips
my eyes are wet, but ill not cry today
you are my strength and ill not loose hope!
if only i could kiss away your pain
it hurts to see my princess weep
the tears wither my skin,
as i lie here, cold and dead!
disclaimer: its just random thoughts put on paper. got nothing to do with my presence. i am very much alive :P
54 comments:
disclaimer was indeed needed... :P
well... i would say it is a POEM :P
and a very interesting perspective here.. sad.. but i liked it.
"well... i would say it is a POEM :P" - thnx for the assurance.. i needed tht :P
happy tht u like it :)
what is it not a poem anil??.. but for me it very much is a poem and that too a beautiful one. sad it is but absolutely beautiful too.
i never knew u r a poet also :p
well i hv conveyed ur msg to divs. and i would try to come to hydrbd along with lena. yes blog union is a great idea.but delhi would be the best venue for it. :)
beautiful :)
Hero...Wow!! 'Who' is the inspiration behind this 'poem'?hope u might have heard the song from the movie Bobby?
Mai.N Shaayar To Nahii.N
Magar Ai Ha.Nsii.N
Jabase Dekhaa, Mai.Nne Tujhako, Mujhako
Shaayarii, Aa Gai..
aisa koi baath hein kya?
i like sad and haunting poems. it helps me get serious :P
this isnt a haunting poem, obviously, but it's nice, as Scrawler asks, who's the inspiration?
oye sweetu, kya baath hain?? hope things r ok at ur end...break-ups happen - later we miss them - wish things didnt turn out that way- all part of life :)
come out of it, asap!!
i just hope this is a translation of ur arlier malalayalam poems...plsss tell me it is..it is..it is..
watever it is i wish u come out of it soon..those were sme beautiful lines sawan..n i cud relate to it..
those "coulds" said it all..
cheer up!
oye kya ho gaya bhai.. you said that you are alive but seems so are the haunting memories of breakup.. :(
I like the last paragraph..reminded me of the song Comfortably Numb by Pink Floyd.."I can heal the pain..get you on your feet again"..
A good attempt!
(The disclaimer was needed. Or I'd very well assume tht I was reading the works of a Zombie! :D)
preetzi, i was never sure i could write a poem, so i told Lena tht i am gona write something and it is supposed to be a poem and better treat it like one :P
thnx for the msg to divz... and preetzi, i dont mind to see anotr city as long as Lena is bringing me truck load of chocolates :P and then maybe you could join us to the trip to hyd. its a good place to visit :P
Karmanna, thnx a lot :)
Scrawler, lol, aise koi baat nahi :) no inspiration as such.. but maybe the memories are playing its trick :P
Freya, happy u liked it :) sometimes unintentionally our memories take over. something like that :)
vinnie darlin, not a translation this time :) but no worries, i am perfectly alright :) no more break ups, i am single for the past one year :P i am already out of it :) thanx swthrt for the concern. luv u loadz!
swati, yeah, kinda liked that pic myself :) it was just momentary burst of emotions. i am perfectly out of it :)thnx for your words :)
ST, lol, break ups are never easy :) but i am over it :) the memories just came back all of a sudden :) being single has its own disadvantages :P
Crystal, welcome here :) you like Pink Floyd? so do i :) yeah zombie right :) you take care dear!
I loved the post a lot...
God knws why... but love is in the air everywhere :)
beautifully written....love has pain too!
damn nice poem. :Claps.. sorry for the facebook thing. well i cant easily let ppl come in my boundaries. pls dont mind...
how i wish to have some one so dear
the pain of my heart, he can hear
he, who can hold me so near
that never in my life i can fear
how i wish to have someone so caring
the every feeling, for only sharing
the cutest smile is wat he is wearing
the pictures of sorrow he is tearing
how i wish to be a dear one
to the best, to that some one
who can see the world in one
its me, only one to very some
how are these lines??? felt these lines after reading your work...!!
nice piece of work Sawan....and dear, disclaimer was not needed..!!
Beautiful...why didnt I come here sooner? You are blogrolled:)
that was wonderful lines..:)
i just loved it..:)
Love and Loss in Love seem to be the flavor lately...first vinay, now u...gosh...such beautiful lines...where do u guys get ur inspiration from??
Beautiful Indeed.
harshita, yeah kind of.. but i saw pain more than happiness around :( hope this season would pass soon! u take care girlie
Ria, yeah and its how we face this pain that decides the fate of out love! take care girlie.
nidzi, oo, thnx *bows* :) np for the face book thingie.. m sorry i tried to intrude :( u take care..
yamini, wow, those are very beautiful words.. thnx so much for those lines! :) take care of ur self and smile.
Mithe, m honored :) take care.
Crazy heart, happy tht u luvd it :P have fun :)
smriti, we get inspiration from beautiful grls like u :P yeah seems like love is in air.. but lot of pain floatin around :( jus wish everything comes to normal soon! take care dear.
nice poem loved it
I loved this.
Is it fiction? Or does it stem from your own past?
Vigneshwar, thnx buddy.. welcome here..
keerthi, nothin is fiction. the works we call fiction - aren't they influenced by our life, eitr directly or indirectly? it did stem out from my own past, the past which i have forgotten lately :P
@ Sawan...it is sad..but liked it...
beautiful...:)
charming poetry there :)
keep writing
Seno, happy tht u liked it! yeah sadness has its own beauty :P
Swayam, thnx :P
priyanka, thnx for your kind words :)
Hi Sawan,
Nice poem. Made me to think of the poor civilians in Palestine. Hope their misery end soon.
i seee :-?
gud one
beautifully put Anil :)
Glaaaddddd ur "very-much-alive"... or else i wud've missed out on a veryyy sweet frnd :)
*sholly* for being soooo late in visiting....
*smiles*
Hey Veni, a new perspective huh?? beautiful!! :) have a grt day.
Peter, thnx for your words :P
Meher, ths so sweet of you :P
its better now than never :P
and somebody vanished while talkin, guess its a power failure :P
@aquagrl & tushar thnx for finding my blog worth following :P
Wow, powerfully and beautifully written. I am so glad I stopped in.
www.mypoeticpath.wordpress.com
Geraldine, your words bring honor to me. Thnx for your kind words.
So beautiful and touching!Hope the princess smiled after reading this :)
thnx sami. i wish she did :P
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