Monday, July 11, 2011

the girl i met in train


curly hair, crimson shades
conscious, composed, elegant
wouldn't smile, i wasn't that scary!
long slender legs, turns every head

'a cup of chai' rests on her lap
a few pages turned, keystrokes on her cell
nails, finely shaped, miss the paint
fingers without rings, single?

plays with her hair, 
big wide eyes, calm, gorgeous
the checks on her shirt
casual, reflects her persona

wonder what's her name
wonder how she sounds
the one who made me write,
the girl i met in train!

44 comments:

Meety said...

I see.. so is she a mallu??? ;-)

sawan said...

guess so! :P

Priya Joyce said...

hehehe :))
great :D

U know I so wanted to write this about the guy i met on the train ths tym bt instead i added him of fb :P

Priya Joyce said...

and ya the same guy told me to check out "I too had a love story" :P

sawan said...

Priya, write write - nothing gives u the ecstasy u get after writing :D 'i too had a love story' is one of the best books i have read. its written by an infoscian and its based on a true life story. the book sale link is on my blog side bar! i read the book in one night and i had tears by the time i finished :)

Priya Joyce said...

i dunn want him to read :P so cn't write :D

n ya will chk tat book :))

sawan said...

haha lol :P okies!!

Priya said...

Nice n sweet...

sawan said...

thanks Priya :)

Gayatri said...

hey.. nice one.. buddy:)

sawan said...

thnx Gayu :)

Oldfox004 said...

thats sweet:)
how's u???

sawan said...

thnx Vinzi :) m great, u tell me

Saru Singhal said...

Sweet ...

sawan said...

Thanks Saru :)

Hemant said...

Hey Saawan....you made a mark in this poem.
Awesome :)

Journo? said...

nice!

sawan said...

Hemant, thanks bro :)

sawan said...

Thanks Journo :)

Hemant said...

And I just read your disclaimer... rather your blog disclaimer...its itself is a piece of art :)

sawan said...

Bro, you sure brought a wide smile on my face, thank you :)

Alka Gurha said...

Lovely weave...but no such luck here.

sawan said...

Alka, the girl who inspired these words might never know this was written for her:) You never know, maybe you have so far inspired a thousand minds :)

Purba said...

You have asked instead of composing poetry in her honour. We bloggers are a flawed lot :p

Beads* said...

Nice inspiration ;)

sawan said...

Purba, lol true! :D i did get her name by the time I left the train, but the whole idea of writing something for her, sitting next to her despite she being a stranger was a pleasure :)

sawan said...

Beads, thnx friend :)

Anuradha Khanna Pentapalli said...

Fingers without rings, single?
wow this is so cool. am tempted to write about people I have met in train and people i don't want to see in trains ;)

would you like to share this lovely poetry on my www.mumbai-localtrains.com blog? would love to have it as a Guest Post with proper credit and link to your site.

sawan said...

Anuradha, Thank you for the note :) I was reading mumbai-localtrains and it seems to be quite a serious blog! One which actually helps the readers with facts and numbers! I am not sure how this casual article would fit in :) If you think it would, you are welcome to use it.

gohost said...

It's pretty good blog. I get it some interesting story in your topic.

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deepazartz said...

This is really sweet:)

"wouldn't smile, i wasn't that scary!"

"fingers without rings, single?"

"wonder how she sounds"

Loved these lines...

deepazartz said...

ps: yes, I am frm Pkd:)
X Victorian like Rajeswari.

sawan said...

gohost, thnx :)

sawan said...

Deepa, yeyy cheers to Victoria :D and thnx for the luv :)

Yamini Meduri said...

wow...she is pretty as i see her through ur words now :)

nice one sawan :)

sawan said...

Thanks Yamini :)

Sush said...

aha...interesting...so u dint ask her name after all

sawan said...

Sush, this world flashes beauty @ every walk of life; at times all you and I could do is stop, appreciate and move on :)

Angel said...

Love comes in the most unexpected places..who knows she might be your soulmate , chase her..lovely lines !

sawan said...

Angel :) your comment brought a smile on my face! thank you :)

Aasiyah said...

sawaaaaaan, you're the man! XD

you were checkin' out some chick yo.
hahahahahahahhahahaha.

i'm kidding.

reminds me of james blunt's you're beautiful.

sawan said...

Aasiyah :) u gave me a smile with ur comment. thnx :)

Shravan RN said...

nice. loved it. and immediately booked my return ticket from home also in train :) who knows if i get to meet one with no rings :)

sawan said...

Shravan, lol :) tell me how the trip was!