Tuesday, April 21, 2009

unsaid words


uncertainty gave impetus to his dejection,
the desire, the passion was killing him.
her words were cryptic, mystifying his sanity
challenging him to apprehend the unsaid.

melancholy in air, he breathes for his life
enraging flames of despair creeps in
evade the agony - some one screamed,
ruthless tiding, he decried and smiled!
after all, its his life, so what if its a mess?

he prayed for the best, anticipation in his eyes
enjoying the bliss engulfing him
she would speak out her heart to him some day,
he would earn the right to know, one day!

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112 comments:

Scattered Thoughts... said...

no comments!!

sawan said...

:) thnx

aqua gurl said...

amazing

Netika Lumb said...

He wants to know of the unsaid, Did he ask?
He hopes she will talk to him one day, will he listen?
He finds bliss in agony, will he ever blame her?
What if he loses his sanity only to be a aprt of her, will she allow?

zyada ho gaya na? I know.. But it's a beautiful piece. If you don't mind, can I copy this and keep it to myself. I mean, I hope you don't sue me one fine day saying it was patented.. :P
So your permision here can be proof that you allowed :)

sawan said...

aqua girl, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Netika, no he din ask. yes he will listen. no he wont blame her. ask her :) thnx a lot swthrt :) you are free to keep it, ill not sue my friend, i promise :)

swati said...

i really am spell bound..sometimes silence speaks more than what words can't say...so its bttr that i shudn't say anything..kudos!!

Netika Lumb said...

I thought this was ficional.. Ahem..ahem.. With your permission, I get to be a part of their Golden "real" love story. thanks :)

sawan said...

swati, thts such an honor grl! thnk u so very much :)

sawan said...

Netika, i could always speak for my characters, even if it is fictional :P and u are welcome to stay, though i never mentioned "real" :P

Vinnie said...

yeah..one day!!...dont we all live in the hope of that "one day"?
passion n hope keeps us going...great piece!

Saranya said...

Hmm, what can I say. Very nice. Amazing as usual!

WarmSunshine said...

Beautiful Anil... simply beautiful!

*smiles*


P.S.... I'm getting a lill jealous, dun ask why :-/

Margaret said...

"She would speak out her heart to him some day"

There's times in life when we have to wait. Wait 'n never lose hope!

It's always well worth waiting for!

A wonderful poem Anil, very deep. Loved it!

Meera said...

Hmm..nice.nice :)
Oh how do u ppl write all this.I could never think all that what you wrote.Superb!

sawan said...

vinnie darlin, how true :)thnx dear :)

sawan said...

saranya, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

meher, u r a sweet heart, u knew it, din ya? :P and u got no reasons to be jealous, tlk to me wen u r free, busy bee :)

sawan said...

margaret, every word from you enlighten me, every compliment honors me :) thnx a lot dear. u take care :)

sawan said...

meera, i am blessed to have beautiful people around me to inspire me :) i just give voice to my feel, its you who create tht feel in me. so thank you :)

Phoenix said...

he prayed for the best, anticipation in his eyes
enjoying the bliss engulfing him
she would speak out her heart to him some day,
he would earn the right to know, one day!<<<

brilliant!! i loved the thought... :)

ARUNA said...

I thought of writing for a change but i guess i will go back to my cooking!!!

sawan said...

phoenix, thnx a lot dear :)

sawan said...

aruna, hehe lol. we know tht u r a brilliant cook, now show us tht u play with words as well. do write. wud luv to read ya. and change this snap or else i wud fall in luv with ya. ur hubby wud have competition u see :P lol

Ria said...

i wonder hw do u express such difficult emotions so effortlessly!! Very well written.

Gagan said...

I'm with Ria on this.

Beautiful work :)
Expressions brought out so effortlessly.

loved it,
Keep writing :D

ki said...

I really like the sentiment behind it. :)
Is it written with someone in mind? :P

sawan said...

ria, wow, thts such an honor dear :) its pretty easy u know, allow urself to dream, analyze your dream and let the emotions flow :) simple, aint it?

sawan said...

gagan, welcome to my space bro :) thnx a ton for liking it :)

sawan said...

kirti, thnx swty :) smart u r :) gud qns! if she says "yes" to him, i shall answer it as yes, otherwise its a no :) how wise is that? :P

Little Girl Lost said...

the poem says so little, and yet says so much... :)
but there seems to be a tiny typo anil, 'he breathe for his life', maybe that should be either breathed or breathes :)

sawan said...

amrita, thnx for telling that :) i changed it!

Freya said...

you just wrote how some lovelorn men keep on waiting for an answer. Some women are pretty tiresome. The worst part is many a time they get no for an answer.

sawan said...

freya, that was way too simple of explaining it and i thought the emotion was way too tough :) cheers to you girl :P

Luscious Sealed Lips said...

Our life is what we wanted it to be at some point in our life.

Kisses.

sawan said...

LSL, how true :) well, i wud say tht our life is what we wanted it to be or what we made it with adjustments and sacrifices done as part of the damage control at all point in our life!

The Pink Orchid said...

i dont know somehow it looks way too real to be fiction.. feels like some very heart felt emotions have been charted out on canvass..

I hope she listens to his heart calling out and replies in a way that gets them what they are looking for in each other... - a refuge from the heat of this world, from the polluted emotions.. a refuge into something pure, somethind divine.. something that redefines both of them.. - him and her.. :)


A BIG HUG TO YOU FOR WRITING THIS ONE..!! :D

Sawan rocks.. the way you picture emotions it could bring life into a stone!! :D

Am I proud of you?!

take a bow! :D

sawan said...

kajal, u r such a swthrt :) wish ur words turn true :P
aww, u r making smile :) thnx a lot for tht luvly commet swty, u know wut, u rock as well. with ur blessings, everything wud be fine. so lord of love, bless me :P

Scrawler said...

:-( :-( :-(

enchantinganki said...

pain,love,agony and wait...every emotion rightly described..!

Awesome work :-)

sawan said...

chechi, enthu patti?? :(

sawan said...

anki, thnx dear :)

Durga said...

shall tell you later.Hope to catch you online this week :-)

sawan said...

okies. ill be online in the evening affter 4 for some time and in the weekend.

Ishu said...

good one!! enjoyed reading it..

sawan said...

ishu, thnx grl :)

Harshita said...

Nothing to say... too good.

Scattered Thoughts... said...

so.. how are you today?

sawan said...

harshita, nothing to say? :( thnx dear for the last two words :P

sawan said...

maheep. wonderful as usual :) hwz ya bro?

Pallav said...

Spectacular.... infact... i m Wordless...

Fantabulous n superb

well well pen down...
:)
Pallav

Tangerine said...

amazing :)

Scattered Thoughts... said...

you sure!! me screwed up as usual !! :P

bondgal_rulz said...

Brilliant thought, amazingly portrayed.

The love bug seems to have bitten quite a few people. ;)

Cheers

P.S. My blog has been blocked for a while. Please leave your e-mail address on my shout box between 11p.m. and 3a.m. so that you can have access to it during sane hours.

Kartz said...

May be the wait will be well worth it... And it will be a lot more sweeter when it actually happens.

But what if that wait is in vain... guess that's the risk one has to take. To show to the one's we care that we *do* care...

Nice words, bro'...

Peace.

Illeen said...

m sure she would speak out,and he wud listen..
awesome!!

sawan said...

pallav, bro, thnx a lot :)

sawan said...

Tangerine, thnx grl :)

sawan said...

maheep, being single is sure good :P lol

sawan said...

Isha, thnx a lot swthrt, i tried to visit ya today and realized tht its open for invitees only, then i searched for a mail id of urs, and din find it :) gud tht u wrote it here :) have put my mail id. invite me :)

sawan said...

kartz, completely agree with ya :) thnx bro :)

sawan said...

illeen, lets see if ur words come true :P thnx dear :)

Pretty Me!! said...

last two lines completely bowled me !!!


god bless ya for such wonderful writes :)

Scattered Thoughts... said...

//being single is sure good//

oh really? then why are you being so ...... (you know what)

but believe me it surely is.. advise from an expert you see !!

Rajlakshmi said...

the last two lines made the overall piece even more beautiful... touching... love the intense emotions you have portrayed...

well penned...

Scrawler said...

another expert joins ST :-)

Aparna said...

Just read the above comment.....
It definitely feels tat i hav read "being single" a longtime back,,,,
and this beautiful poem is here to stay,,,,
Ya one day may be she will listen....
And why everyone around me is singing tat same line :)
i just wonder......

ARUNA said...

Sawan, i really wanted to change the pic, but after this comment......changed my mind!!!
Wait lemme go and show this to my husband!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

sawan said...

Pratzi, thnx stwhrt :)

sawan said...

maheep, i know bro. some times suicide looks like an interesting concept, wut say? :P

sawan said...

aruna, hehehe lol... so wut did he say?? :P m sure he wud hav pampered u a lil more this time :P good goin grl :D have fun :)

Pavitra .... said...

wow.....that was lovely...!!
you're really brilliant..!!
keep it up!
the last two lines said it all.....

sawan said...

Rajlakshmi, thnx for ur luvly words yaar :) u take care :D

sawan said...

chechi, yesh yesh yesh. more like an official in house critic :P lol

sawan said...

Aparna, hehe, i still say tht being single is definitely beautiful. then there is this piece of saying: "the grass in the other shore is always greener" :P u take care grl :) and thnx for ur luvly comment :D have fun.

sawan said...

Pavitra, thnx a lot grl :) u take care :D

My opinion said...

nice man.......... keep writing >

rahul said...

really nice lines..best poetry is understanding the rhymes of silence!!

ARUNA said...

Pampering!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!All that happens when u r a girlfriend, not when u r a wife, haha! U enjoy being single for the time being....i don't wan2 ruin it!

sawan said...

my opinion, thnx bro :)

sawan said...

rahul, u said it bro!! thnx a lot..

sawan said...

aruna, hehe lol.. shw this to ur hubby, remind him tht he needs to pamper you now also :P

ki said...

Well? Did you ask? What did she say? :D

preeti said...

good one there.. esp last two lines.. Waiting for the one you love is bliss..

sawan said...

kirti, wen did i say its about me?? :P maybe he did ask, he din tell me :P

sawan said...

preetzi darlin, it sure is :P

Keshi said...

Sawan Im so over romance and waiting for my soul-mate etc lol sorry!

Keshi.

Babli said...

Marvellous..You are a fantastic poet.

sawan said...

keshi girl :) why sorry???

sawan said...

babli, thnx dear. you yourself seems to be a wonderful poet!! welcome here :)

Little Girl Lost said...

ANIL- come and read! come and read!

Keshi said...

Sorry for being so blunt in this post...thats why lol!

Keshi.

sawan said...

amrita, m goin right there :)

lafemmereva said...

nice poem!!!

sawan said...

keshi, no need for a sorry grl :) u have the freedom to be blunt or say wut ever u feel like :)

sawan said...

revati, thnx grl :)

Priyanka Khot said...

You defined all the love affairs of the world in these two lines:

"her words were cryptic, mystifying his sanity
challenging him to apprehend the unsaid."

That is what the game of love is all about... isn't it?

sawan said...

priya, well maybe yes :) but as for all the games, the rules maybe different and so maybe the tactics to win :P

welcome here dear :)

sujata said...

Poetry without mush..is a definite challenge..it was good going through your work..keep writing!!

sawan said...

sujatha, thnx :) ur words brings re-assurance :)welcome here.

ki said...

just remembered your HINT! :D

sawan said...

:D

ki said...

I got it, I got it!!! Now keep me updated na!!!

tinkerbell said...

what a portrayal... !

sawan said...

kirti, finally u got it!! :)

sawan said...

isra, thnx grl :)

Gauri Mathur said...

:)

sawan said...

why smiling chotu? :)

NAMELESS FAMELESS said...

very strong lines there !

sawan said...

Saswati, just learned ur name! thnx for liking it grl :)

Meera said...

hmmm..ipozhan enikku ithu sherikku manasilayithu :)
*hugs*

sawan said...

:) ippazhelum manasilaayallo :P