uncertainty gave impetus to his dejection,
the desire, the passion was killing him.
her words were cryptic, mystifying his sanity
challenging him to apprehend the unsaid.
melancholy in air, he breathes for his life
enraging flames of despair creeps in
evade the agony - some one screamed,
ruthless tiding, he decried and smiled!
after all, its his life, so what if its a mess?
he prayed for the best, anticipation in his eyes
enjoying the bliss engulfing him
she would speak out her heart to him some day,
he would earn the right to know, one day!
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no comments!!
:) thnx
amazing
He wants to know of the unsaid, Did he ask?
He hopes she will talk to him one day, will he listen?
He finds bliss in agony, will he ever blame her?
What if he loses his sanity only to be a aprt of her, will she allow?
zyada ho gaya na? I know.. But it's a beautiful piece. If you don't mind, can I copy this and keep it to myself. I mean, I hope you don't sue me one fine day saying it was patented.. :P
So your permision here can be proof that you allowed :)
aqua girl, thnx dear :)
Netika, no he din ask. yes he will listen. no he wont blame her. ask her :) thnx a lot swthrt :) you are free to keep it, ill not sue my friend, i promise :)
i really am spell bound..sometimes silence speaks more than what words can't say...so its bttr that i shudn't say anything..kudos!!
I thought this was ficional.. Ahem..ahem.. With your permission, I get to be a part of their Golden "real" love story. thanks :)
swati, thts such an honor grl! thnk u so very much :)
Netika, i could always speak for my characters, even if it is fictional :P and u are welcome to stay, though i never mentioned "real" :P
yeah..one day!!...dont we all live in the hope of that "one day"?
passion n hope keeps us going...great piece!
Hmm, what can I say. Very nice. Amazing as usual!
Beautiful Anil... simply beautiful!
*smiles*
P.S.... I'm getting a lill jealous, dun ask why :-/
"She would speak out her heart to him some day"
There's times in life when we have to wait. Wait 'n never lose hope!
It's always well worth waiting for!
A wonderful poem Anil, very deep. Loved it!
Hmm..nice.nice :)
Oh how do u ppl write all this.I could never think all that what you wrote.Superb!
vinnie darlin, how true :)thnx dear :)
saranya, thnx dear :)
meher, u r a sweet heart, u knew it, din ya? :P and u got no reasons to be jealous, tlk to me wen u r free, busy bee :)
margaret, every word from you enlighten me, every compliment honors me :) thnx a lot dear. u take care :)
meera, i am blessed to have beautiful people around me to inspire me :) i just give voice to my feel, its you who create tht feel in me. so thank you :)
he prayed for the best, anticipation in his eyes
enjoying the bliss engulfing him
she would speak out her heart to him some day,
he would earn the right to know, one day!<<<
brilliant!! i loved the thought... :)
I thought of writing for a change but i guess i will go back to my cooking!!!
phoenix, thnx a lot dear :)
aruna, hehe lol. we know tht u r a brilliant cook, now show us tht u play with words as well. do write. wud luv to read ya. and change this snap or else i wud fall in luv with ya. ur hubby wud have competition u see :P lol
i wonder hw do u express such difficult emotions so effortlessly!! Very well written.
I'm with Ria on this.
Beautiful work :)
Expressions brought out so effortlessly.
loved it,
Keep writing :D
I really like the sentiment behind it. :)
Is it written with someone in mind? :P
ria, wow, thts such an honor dear :) its pretty easy u know, allow urself to dream, analyze your dream and let the emotions flow :) simple, aint it?
gagan, welcome to my space bro :) thnx a ton for liking it :)
kirti, thnx swty :) smart u r :) gud qns! if she says "yes" to him, i shall answer it as yes, otherwise its a no :) how wise is that? :P
the poem says so little, and yet says so much... :)
but there seems to be a tiny typo anil, 'he breathe for his life', maybe that should be either breathed or breathes :)
amrita, thnx for telling that :) i changed it!
you just wrote how some lovelorn men keep on waiting for an answer. Some women are pretty tiresome. The worst part is many a time they get no for an answer.
freya, that was way too simple of explaining it and i thought the emotion was way too tough :) cheers to you girl :P
Our life is what we wanted it to be at some point in our life.
Kisses.
LSL, how true :) well, i wud say tht our life is what we wanted it to be or what we made it with adjustments and sacrifices done as part of the damage control at all point in our life!
i dont know somehow it looks way too real to be fiction.. feels like some very heart felt emotions have been charted out on canvass..
I hope she listens to his heart calling out and replies in a way that gets them what they are looking for in each other... - a refuge from the heat of this world, from the polluted emotions.. a refuge into something pure, somethind divine.. something that redefines both of them.. - him and her.. :)
A BIG HUG TO YOU FOR WRITING THIS ONE..!! :D
Sawan rocks.. the way you picture emotions it could bring life into a stone!! :D
Am I proud of you?!
take a bow! :D
kajal, u r such a swthrt :) wish ur words turn true :P
aww, u r making smile :) thnx a lot for tht luvly commet swty, u know wut, u rock as well. with ur blessings, everything wud be fine. so lord of love, bless me :P
:-( :-( :-(
pain,love,agony and wait...every emotion rightly described..!
Awesome work :-)
chechi, enthu patti?? :(
anki, thnx dear :)
shall tell you later.Hope to catch you online this week :-)
okies. ill be online in the evening affter 4 for some time and in the weekend.
good one!! enjoyed reading it..
ishu, thnx grl :)
Nothing to say... too good.
so.. how are you today?
harshita, nothing to say? :( thnx dear for the last two words :P
maheep. wonderful as usual :) hwz ya bro?
Spectacular.... infact... i m Wordless...
Fantabulous n superb
well well pen down...
:)
Pallav
amazing :)
you sure!! me screwed up as usual !! :P
Brilliant thought, amazingly portrayed.
The love bug seems to have bitten quite a few people. ;)
Cheers
P.S. My blog has been blocked for a while. Please leave your e-mail address on my shout box between 11p.m. and 3a.m. so that you can have access to it during sane hours.
May be the wait will be well worth it... And it will be a lot more sweeter when it actually happens.
But what if that wait is in vain... guess that's the risk one has to take. To show to the one's we care that we *do* care...
Nice words, bro'...
Peace.
m sure she would speak out,and he wud listen..
awesome!!
pallav, bro, thnx a lot :)
Tangerine, thnx grl :)
maheep, being single is sure good :P lol
Isha, thnx a lot swthrt, i tried to visit ya today and realized tht its open for invitees only, then i searched for a mail id of urs, and din find it :) gud tht u wrote it here :) have put my mail id. invite me :)
kartz, completely agree with ya :) thnx bro :)
illeen, lets see if ur words come true :P thnx dear :)
last two lines completely bowled me !!!
god bless ya for such wonderful writes :)
//being single is sure good//
oh really? then why are you being so ...... (you know what)
but believe me it surely is.. advise from an expert you see !!
the last two lines made the overall piece even more beautiful... touching... love the intense emotions you have portrayed...
well penned...
another expert joins ST :-)
Just read the above comment.....
It definitely feels tat i hav read "being single" a longtime back,,,,
and this beautiful poem is here to stay,,,,
Ya one day may be she will listen....
And why everyone around me is singing tat same line :)
i just wonder......
Sawan, i really wanted to change the pic, but after this comment......changed my mind!!!
Wait lemme go and show this to my husband!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Pratzi, thnx stwhrt :)
maheep, i know bro. some times suicide looks like an interesting concept, wut say? :P
aruna, hehehe lol... so wut did he say?? :P m sure he wud hav pampered u a lil more this time :P good goin grl :D have fun :)
wow.....that was lovely...!!
you're really brilliant..!!
keep it up!
the last two lines said it all.....
Rajlakshmi, thnx for ur luvly words yaar :) u take care :D
chechi, yesh yesh yesh. more like an official in house critic :P lol
Aparna, hehe, i still say tht being single is definitely beautiful. then there is this piece of saying: "the grass in the other shore is always greener" :P u take care grl :) and thnx for ur luvly comment :D have fun.
Pavitra, thnx a lot grl :) u take care :D
nice man.......... keep writing >
really nice lines..best poetry is understanding the rhymes of silence!!
Pampering!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!All that happens when u r a girlfriend, not when u r a wife, haha! U enjoy being single for the time being....i don't wan2 ruin it!
my opinion, thnx bro :)
rahul, u said it bro!! thnx a lot..
aruna, hehe lol.. shw this to ur hubby, remind him tht he needs to pamper you now also :P
Well? Did you ask? What did she say? :D
good one there.. esp last two lines.. Waiting for the one you love is bliss..
kirti, wen did i say its about me?? :P maybe he did ask, he din tell me :P
preetzi darlin, it sure is :P
Sawan Im so over romance and waiting for my soul-mate etc lol sorry!
Keshi.
Marvellous..You are a fantastic poet.
keshi girl :) why sorry???
babli, thnx dear. you yourself seems to be a wonderful poet!! welcome here :)
ANIL- come and read! come and read!
Sorry for being so blunt in this post...thats why lol!
Keshi.
amrita, m goin right there :)
nice poem!!!
keshi, no need for a sorry grl :) u have the freedom to be blunt or say wut ever u feel like :)
revati, thnx grl :)
You defined all the love affairs of the world in these two lines:
"her words were cryptic, mystifying his sanity
challenging him to apprehend the unsaid."
That is what the game of love is all about... isn't it?
priya, well maybe yes :) but as for all the games, the rules maybe different and so maybe the tactics to win :P
welcome here dear :)
Poetry without mush..is a definite challenge..it was good going through your work..keep writing!!
sujatha, thnx :) ur words brings re-assurance :)welcome here.
just remembered your HINT! :D
I got it, I got it!!! Now keep me updated na!!!
what a portrayal... !
kirti, finally u got it!! :)
isra, thnx grl :)
:)
why smiling chotu? :)
very strong lines there !
Saswati, just learned ur name! thnx for liking it grl :)
hmmm..ipozhan enikku ithu sherikku manasilayithu :)
*hugs*
:) ippazhelum manasilaayallo :P
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