Thursday, December 24, 2009

hope

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darkness surround me.
the chillness in wind freeze my blood.
stars appear as tiny dots. far away. faded.
i search for the moon, the frame of the building blocks my view. no hope.
i stand with my eyes open. i dont see light.
i shiver, not sure if its the cold or the fear.

i closed my eyes and listen.
fluttering of leaves - there is air to breathe.
a faint voice of laughter - far away i hear life.
the calmness was broken by the screeching of wheels -
few metres away, a train crossed the bridge.
i could hear it gaining momentum, carying hundreds towards their destiny.
hundreds who chose to fight their fear for their goals. hope.
i stand with my eyes closed. i see light.
i shiver, now sure that its the cold.

i opened my eyes. nothing has changed except that now I smile.

32 comments:

Netika Lumb said...

Awww..last line was killer..
Hope everything's well with you now :)

Meera said...

Such a positive note! :) Awesome!
I loved the line - "i stand with my eyes closed. i see light." It is always like that and hope is what always brings a smile.
Smile smile :) :)

Shravan | ശ്രവണ്‍ said...

and now thats positive :D

Manjari Singh said...

that was beautiful!

Ria said...

beautifully written!! :)

ki said...

I like this a lot. :)

sawan said...

Netika, u first!! wow :) thnx dear. all well, or atleast i like to believe tht way :)

sawan said...

Meera, Thnx dear :) I wish to see either of ur blog live and with action. and the other one for which u gave me permissions, looks like u revoked the permissions :P

sawan said...

Shravan, yes it was :) hwz u bro?

sawan said...

Manjari, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Ria, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Ki, thnx sweets :)

Meera said...

Ah no. That blog was not imported. Its a new one and will always remain private. Over a cup is public now. No public blogging for a while. :)

Satyu said...

Awesome!!

Seriously.. its beautiful :)

ANWESA said...

I loved the last line.

Rajlakshmi said...

thats a very beautiful ending... beautifully penned :)

A Poetess said...

Thats a great one especially with the timing of this post...right in time with the Christmas festivity and the season of hope & joy!!
Merry Christmas to you and thanks for the change notification in ur post..I've also set up a redirecting thingy from the old set up. Hope this helps!
Cheers.

Parv Kaushik said...

very interesting and lovely!!! loved the ending!! good work!

Dr Supriya said...

Nice thoughts.. Beautifully written.

Americanising Desi said...

can you inject me with ur positivity :)

loved it!

Chandrika Shubham said...

Beautiful words were woven beautifully. I liked the last line. :)
Best wishes.

Netika Lumb said...

You have been tagged :)

sawan said...

Meera, ohkies, new online diary? :) nice. its safe than a paper diary. do write, blogsville wud never be complete without its authors.

sawan said...

Satyu, thnx girl :)

sawan said...

Anwesa, i loved it too :)

sawan said...

Lakshmi, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Poetess, u have a wonderful and eventful new year dear :)

sawan said...

Parv, thnx bro :)

sawan said...

Priya, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

AD, are you prepared to take it?cos the medicine works only if you are prepared!! :P thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Chandrika, thnx dear :)

sawan said...

Netika, saw that dear. wud do it :)